This is a medium-length swords and sorcery story written on the Twine platform. Unfortunately, I don’t think most players will stick with that game beyond the first screen or two. I say this for two reasons: first, at least in my browser, the black text was difficult to read towards the periphery of a radial gradient that is white at the center, but dark grey near the edges. I at least have a quick fix for that issue: go into a text editor and delete the CSS that sets the background:
body {
background-image: radial-gradient(White, Grey, Black);
height:100vh;
width:100%;
}
The other game stopper for this story is the rate of spelling errors. It’s almost like the story was spellchecked in reverse to assure one error in every paragraph. I know that some reviewers stop when they find a game that shows no signs of beta-testing or even spellcheck. Next comp, I think I’ll follow that practice, particularly if the number of entries is on par with this year. Since I had given full review to other poorly edited games, though, I decided to keep going with this one, but skimmed the text.
[Some spoilers follow beyond this point]








